英语翻译查错

请帮我看看这封信有没有语法错误,谢谢!
Dear Dan,
This is I first time writes a letter to you, the mood incomparably isexcited I want to ask your two questions In the sixth movie, has Harry and the Ginny lips? If you do not want to reply also the line Moreover Leavesden Studios opens to the tourist? This year is China's mouse year, delivers you a lovable small mouse, please accept
Please write to me soon!
Yours,
Jack
另附上中文:
这是我第一次给您写信,心情无比激动.我想问你两个问题.在第六部电影中,有Harry和Ginny的吻吗?如果你不想回答也行.另外Leavesden Studios对游客开放吗?今年是中国的鼠年,送你一只可爱的小老鼠,请收下.
请速回信!

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write 不是writes
不是deliver
deliver 是侍租说你送到老宴兆他手上
用send 就好
please accept it

不是lovable
是lovely
最后祥兄一句
Hope to hear from you soon

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Dear Dan,
Because it is my first time to write to you, I am so excited .I have two questions ,firstly I want to know whether Harry and the Ginny had a kiss in the sixth movie, if you would not like to answer, it is ok.Secondly I want to know whether Leavesden Studios opens to the tourist.
This year is Chinese mouse year, so I send you a small lovely mouse, please accept it.

Hope to hear from you soon.

Yours,

Jack

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Dear Dan,
It's my first time to write you a letter, so I am exciting very much.
I want to ask you two questions about the sixth movie.Is there a kiss happen to Harry and the Ginny in this film? Of cause you can keep silent. Moreover, does Leavesden Studios open to tourist?
This year is Chinese mouse year, I give you a small lovely mouse toy as a present,accept it please.
I expect your letter soon!
Yours sincerely
Jack

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This is the first time I write to you with the mood .I want to ask you two questions, In the six movies,does Harry kiss Ginny? If you do not want to reply ,that is OK。Does Leavesden Studios opens to the tourist? This year is China's mouse year, send you a lovable small mouse, please accept.
Please write to me soon!
Yours,

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